All of the feedback I recieved was constructive and I felt like everyone was trying to help me come up with a better pitch for this assignment. The feedback that stood out the most was the lack of continuity with my pitch. I did go back and listen to my pitch and found I paused between sentences and words too often. I did not find any feedback to be wrong or silly.
My second elevator pitch is very similar to my first pitch. And thanks to the feedback I recieved from my classmates I made some adjustments to my wording. I also tried to limit my pauses and work on my flow. I changed my suit and location, but I did not want to make too many changes at once. I hope to progress with the next group to provide feedback.
Elevator Pitch No.2
Marcos,
ReplyDeleteYou were able to speak well and pause appropriately. I would recommend a little more energy/excitement. I realize that talking in front of the computer is odd, it throws me off being able to see myself while I am trying to speak! Good job!
Hi Marcos, I think you did an excellent job of explaining your idea clearly and simply. My only recommendations are to maybe end it at 1:21min. I liked that closing sentence more than the one that followed. I also think you should talk a tiny bit faster. These suggestions are just being nitpicky because your elevator pitch is already really great!
ReplyDeleteHello Marcos,
ReplyDeleteit was great pitch with good idea. I can tell that how you concentrate effort to get better than first elevator pitch. I think feedback from your classmates is good idea to get better for pitch. The things that you mention about the problems are paused between sentences and words too often. However, this time you did well on your flow and it was nice gesture. Great job with your second elevator pitch.
Hey Marcos,
ReplyDeleteI feel like did a very good job explaining to the audience what your ideas are. You were very clear in your message and I feel like the people listening to you would be impressed. I feel like your spacing was great between sentences, and you didn't rush through your dialogue. Keep up the great work and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your posts.
Marcos,
ReplyDeleteGreat effort. I was clearly able to hear you speak and I really thought your constant emphasis on specific words was perfect. That said I think that you should revist the order of your pitch again. I think the middle should come sooner. Lastly, I think you should think of how your app would be different in connecting people than the current apps out there. Whatever that may be, if you focus on that in the beginning of your pitch I believe it will really help grab your audience and sell your idea much easier.
Marcos,
ReplyDeleteI think your pitch the second time around was ten times better. The first one wasn't bad, but your second video was very well polished, and you seemed more confident. Your idea was also concisely presented, and was easy to understand. Good work.